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Feel
I don't want to feel anymore
I can't take the pain
I don't want to care
I don't want to feel anymore
It sears and it burns
Creating hell.
I don't want to feel anymore
I can't cope, anymore
I can't take the strain
I want to Switch off
I can't mask my inner turmoil anymore
Switch off the insanity
I dont want to feel anymore
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
lou
Wed, 2011-02-02 04:06
Ian
This poem falls into the category, of auto biographical, but only on occasion, if felt like this constantly, it wouldn't be worth continuing.
lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
mand
Wed, 2011-02-02 03:51
Hi Lou
Like Yenti says, not sure if this is what you are feeling like right now - I wish I was there with you. ((((hug)))). I feel for you, we all have different circumstances, no two people feel exactly the same, given the same circumstance/upbringing etc. So what you are going through is unique to you. I do Know how terrible it feels in your head when your head is swimming around in negativity. ( torture ). I'm sorry your going through the agony.
Know that we care Lou.
I agree with Yenti, if this is fiction then it has a strong emotional impact.
I hope, for your sake, it is fictional.
Love Mand xxxxxxxxxx
lou
Wed, 2011-02-02 04:20
Mand
Thank you very much , as i see it poems have several functions, one being a mental clear ou,t or at least a way for the author to sort thoughts out, another function is allow the reader feel somehing they may not have experience of..
You're a really nice person
much love lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
mand
Wed, 2011-02-02 05:07
Hi Lou
True. Thumbs up to both.
Brilliant poem
Love Mand xxxx
Candlewitch
Fri, 2011-02-04 10:56
Dear Lou,
I don't want to feel anymore
I can't cope, anymore
I can't take the strain
I'm with Shirl on this one. Very raw and powerful. I wouldn't change a word of it.
Here's my (((Hug))) too!
love, Cat
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lou
Fri, 2011-02-04 10:59
Oh thank you Cat
you are so sweet and kind.
love Lou
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
Kailashana2
Fri, 2011-02-04 13:07
Yeah, well I'm a glutton for
Yeah, well I'm a glutton for punishment or I'd have offed my character long ago, but I know exactly what you mean... in fact, I'm waiting for my own personal doomsday, or so it may seem.
(It's not being on the miserable side or the happy-go-lucky bouncing baby side, it's this fucking to'ing and fro'ing that's wearing me down like a clown full of stage-fright and that's never a pretty sight.)
~A
Race_9togo
Fri, 2011-02-04 14:49
Lou,
Show me someone who has never felt this way, and I'll show you a psychotic, or a god!
Been feeling like this myself, recently.
You nailed it exactly.
Nothing I would change, no criticism to make.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
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