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GREY WINTER
In puddles
trees walked slowly along beside me
their heads low in the grey winter morning,
no breeze stirred,
no shiver of light.
A bland white glow from the dawn
reflected my eye, its tear,
that softly slid down my cheek to my mouth,
sustenance to trembling lips
drawn and sad.
Withered leaves hung limp,
flowers shrivelled and pale,
grasses bleached straws,
the flight of a black crow
aimlessly flapping.
The distant sound of a curlew,
cries on the hills
a sudden sharp searing screech
from a machine.
A broken instrument
hollowed and cracked
awaiting the blast of storms;
dark nights and driving clouds
across the moon,
obliterating the sun.
Style / type:
Free verse
Last few words:
Always the dull heavy grey weather affects my brain.
I am not sad. Ann.
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Comments
wesley snow
Mon, 2011-12-05 22:15
Now this is ekphrasis.
A single moment, description only. Elegant. wesley
W. H. Snow
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scribbler
Mon, 2011-12-05 22:29
hello
Very descriptive of both surroundings and state of mind...................stan
loved
Tue, 2011-12-06 09:54
thanks for
sharing Ma'am
loved
Eduardo Cruz
Tue, 2011-12-06 16:36
Ann
The feel of the winter is conveyed here with great care as if almost a cold death reach out to embrace ones soul.
This was sort of dark from you, but I guess that winter has it's place in the universe so as to remind us of the warmth of spring. It is only at the next bend waiting for us.
Eddie
LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE
Nordic cloud
Wed, 2012-01-11 09:03
Thank you all
Thank you all, Eddie, Winter has this feel you here describe so well, a sadness in the colours and the hanging dead leaves that still cling to their twigs and straws, a brittle delicacy, as if they would become nothing at the slightest touch. But then when the sun shines on the lumps of snow on their seed pods they can be laughed at for looking so cocky.
Just today there was a red plastic sack and a wound blue tubing, they looked like two people the tall blue one upright, a bit like a Christ with his robe, and the bent little red one a bit like a dwarfed Santa; when I came close they were just objects, but they caused an exciting imagined pair.
So humour is just round the corner in our minds!
Ann
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Candlewitch
Sat, 2012-01-14 12:58
Dear Ann,
Thank you for a glimpse of part your world. I loved the somber imagery and these lines:
A broken instrument
hollowed and cracked
awaiting the blast of storms;
dark nights and driving clouds
across the moon,
obliterating the sun.
have no fear, sweet Ann, spring will always come.
always, Cat
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Nordic cloud
Sun, 2012-01-15 03:48
What a lovely comment Cat.
I have no fear, in fact the sombre and subtle colours
of Winter's moods interests and fascinates me,
I would not wish myself where the sun shines all the time,
and the trees stay dressed as they do in parts of Australia.
My aunt went into raptures on seeing the bare trees once again,
having married an Australian (conductor) and lived there most of her life.
Perhaps the changes of season also help us to change
and renew ourselves, and our poetry to do likewise.
Ann.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
Geremia
Mon, 2012-01-16 18:13
Anni. mi piace tutta la tua
Anni. mi piace tutta la tua poesia, sai? Ma questa qui è propria 'na bellezza.
Il Longobardolino
Nordic cloud
Tue, 2012-01-17 03:23
Miile grazie Il
Miile grazie Il Longobardolino.
Anni.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
wesley snow
Tue, 2012-01-17 13:45
Are you guys talking about me behind my language?
I bet you are. wesley
W. H. Snow
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Geremia
Tue, 2012-01-17 14:13
Caro Wes,
Caro Wes,
Certo di no ! Ma mi pare un' ottima idea [RISATE (LOL) ]
[Of course not. But it sounds like a great idea :LOL]
Giuseppe Bernardo Giovanni Longo casa Geremia = Joe