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another letter from Home
I feel your hopeless, endless grieving
and both our journeys you impede
there's reason in your remaining quick
and now, I with you, gently plead
to forgive me, let me go, allow me
move on and do what I have to do
my purpose over there is finished
apart, that is, from my love for you
it makes no difference where we are
love doesn't leave, or even change
when happens any separation
there’s nought to have to re-arrange
for love is far beyond eternal
never, ever will it fade
it twines and binds and forms the base
of the colourful tapestry we have made
our memories are linked in this
weaved into Akasha of evermore
until forever’s final midnight
we are together on perception’s shore
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Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:32
thanks jc
for the great comment
love and hugest hugs
judd
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Ayaz Warith
Tue, 2010-11-09 02:34
I love this poem because its
I love this poem because its distinct language goes straight to my heart. I appreciate the whole stuff, Judy.
Regards
Ayaz
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:32
so lovely of you to say that ayaz
thank you very much
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:33
so glad shirl
thanks for the lovely comment
love to you
judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
magics02
Tue, 2010-11-09 08:02
Speechless
This is so good Judy and I also bookmark it. What a seren poem you have did here. Just marvelous.
Love to you
xooxo
Mona
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:34
hi magics
thank you so much - glad you liked it.
love from
judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
ziggy
Tue, 2010-11-09 14:06
hi'd
yes a beauty of a write which needs nothing
but to be read well written and enjoyed ,,,,,,,,,,
jayne got it right with her comment ,,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:34
thanks ziggy
great to see you again
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Bonitaj
Tue, 2010-11-09 14:32
Judy!
I was just scrolling down and this piece stopped me in my tracks!
Sounds like lines coming out of a current movie... who should we cast as the main protagonists?
Relevant, up to the minute depiction of a love that must move on!
Nice one!
Boni
Bonitaj
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:35
hi boni
thanks for the visit and the great comment
love
judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
Nordic cloud
Wed, 2010-11-10 06:48
The great tapestries of love
The great tapestries of love hang on your walls and their warm presence soothes and satisfies your thoughts each day and forever more; yes so true if the love is real and felt it never leaves whatever tries to crush or stamp on it, it survives all blows with its constancy and wondrous power, it is what makes this life a joy, and full of happiness we step into the next day strong.
Very nice judyanne, I see, I hear, I feel what you mean exactly, and understand.
annnaya's love.
"The image of yourself which you see in a mirror Is dead,
but the reflection of the moon on water, lives." Kenzan.
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:36
love to you annanya
from judyanne
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
scribbler
Wed, 2010-11-10 06:53
letters
If all comments to this point haven't made your head swell to the point of exploding this may lol. I see no room for improvement.........scribbler
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 12:37
you sweety stan!
but you know it was one of your poems that inspired this
do you remember me telling you you had set this off?
thanks for the great comment
love
judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
judyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 13:32
lovely to get that wee heart of yours pounding rosina
thank you for the beautiful compliment
love
judy
xxxx
ps - your feelings in your poem were obvious, do persevere with it for it had the makings of one of your little masterpieces rosi
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
loved
Wed, 2010-11-10 13:48
WHY I READ YOU ALL
Each one on this old,
Now new neopoet
Is a classic
I learn from the very core
That each one of you reveals
From the fathoms
Of your hearts!
How I wish I too had
Such a fathomless heart,
As love sinks deep
In each poem I read
My mind does plead
Oh Loved
When wilt thou accomplish
Such a deed
I wonder and shudder
That’s all indeed.
Your poetries are jewels
Strewn across the Internet
I have by now fully screened
But nothing comes in-between
Neopoet and betwixt us all
That’s all
What I really mean.
loved
judyanne
Sat, 2015-02-21 00:52
I'm slowly editing my old works
(Trying not do do so too often as not too fill up the stream)
So when I came to this, I found your comment I'd missed responding to.
Thanks loved
Love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)