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IF AT ALL WE KNEW
There is nothing at all
we know
if at all
what will happen next
if a disaster we'd die before
if one of happiness
laced with jealousy
then we'd all fall
ere the fall
if at all we knew
what was coming anew
life would be like morning dew
stamped and trampled
by many
not few
only our love
if we knew
we were in arms
of each other due
then we'd say later
to one another
my only love
we knew
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
There Is a TIME to Love and a Time to DIE
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
lovedly
Fri, 2021-02-19 13:03
ANOTHER ONE
LEFT OUT GO SEE
lovedly
Sat, 2021-02-20 23:00
why not know
try to read this 2
its being pushed
down the stream
lovedly
Mon, 2021-02-22 15:33
WHY
DON'T YOU WANT to know
NEOS
Gracy
Tue, 2021-02-23 21:28
Hello L, good poem. It would
Hello L, good poem. It would be great if you were to include "there is a time to love and a time to die."
You have some good rhymes. Lovely imagery about the trampled grass and morning dew. Maybe the title could be different, dunno, but think about it. Just my offering.
Enjoyed, Gracy
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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury
lovedly
Tue, 2021-02-23 22:23
Ma'am Gracy
your advent is like cement to my mind
to think and imagination combine
we shall dine in my mind
and sing
as you say
''There is a time to love and a time to die''
I have loved all along
now I feel it's time to say
good bye
But no one knows
not even I
when to say good bye
Even if I try
don't know why