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Symphony Poeticity
THE BEAUTY
of poetry
such as this
is in itself a mark of symphony
melodious as it is
where even deaf can hear
through the eyes and hearts
tears wash away all our fears
when we read poetry
from our loved ones
near and dear
such as you my poet
supreme
where in the darkness of life
have you left me
serene
on a road as lonely
and
bereft,
of all life
I thought in me
still was left
sing a song of harmony
love and kisses
in between
when we meet
just ask
have we met
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Interactive poetry
Lately on few sites
I traverse daily
I come across poets
desperately lonely
thinking of themselves only
will the world not become
void
when it of them becomes devoid
Such folks take my heart away
I on their behalf for them do pray
Have mercy poets any way
they are shallow in a
shocking way
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Comments
IRiz
Tue, 2018-05-22 22:23
Great poem, dear Lovedly
Great poem, dear Lovedly
Lines six and seven are unclear.
May I suggest instead something perhaps similar in spirit,
where even deaf can hear
through the eyes and hearts
Just a suggestion.
IRiz
lovedly
Tue, 2018-05-22 23:24
well ...well taken
will do tomorrow
eyes drooping
since morning
thanks Irene and good night
lovedly
Tue, 2018-05-22 23:28
couldn't wait till tomorrow where one would be so now done'd it
where even deaf can hear
through the eyes and hearts
great
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2018-05-23 18:19
Lovely poem lovedly
I really felt the tone of love, like sun rays in my heart, from reading this gem. There’s so much egotism emitted it’s a freshness not always felt when we meet people on the street.
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lovedly
Wed, 2018-05-23 18:37
Your visit Barbara ... is DELIGHTFUL
Of Collaboration
I am
FRIGHTFUL
Can't match
FREESTYLE
as all here are mostly
WESTERNIZED
I am all like mixed fruity -Jam
Any way my thanks
Barbara Writes
Wed, 2018-05-23 18:45
Haha
Your wonderful
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IRiz
Sun, 2018-05-27 13:54
Hello Lovedly,
Hello Lovedly,
Where have you disappeared?
I did not hear
from you for almost a week!
Are you writing something big?
I just thought
that you might want to know,
that you and your poems
are missed.
IRiz
lovedly
Sun, 2018-05-27 14:18
I always wish
you cross my page
without a personal rage
I am of poetry just a
crumpled page
do read mine
MILITARY poem
Contest one
now posted
Thanks for your diligence
Lady Irene
IRiz
Sun, 2018-05-27 14:23
Use brittle page, I suggest.
Use brittle page, I suggest. I love this word.
Okay I will check.i don't see it on your page.
Perhaps later.
IRiz
lovedly
Sun, 2018-05-27 14:46
I think brittle
will be better than little
LOL
brittle then twill be
brit·tle
ˈbridl/
adjective
adjective: brittle
1.
hard but liable to break or shatter easily.
"her bones became fragile and brittle"
synonyms: breakable, fragile, delicate; splintery;
formal frangible
raj
Sun, 2018-05-27 15:25
Hi Lovedly
good thoughts expressed in this poem. Personally I feel you can do away with the last 2 stanzas or replace them to be in sync / progression with the earlier ones...
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raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Sun, 2018-05-27 17:00
yeah thanks raj
I had a guy in mind
who was showing his
you know what
and if i do shed the two stanzas '
it would appear my Fatigues
also fell off
lol
believe me '
this world loves to see nudes
come to Niagara
You have seen
Sparrow
Mon, 2018-05-28 03:17
Loved
I is here and did read ,
It was music to my ears
So there you have no fears
Just be as you always are,
Yours Ian..
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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti