Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
Antifib
Real eyes
realise
real lies
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
weirdelf
Tue, 2014-10-21 23:12
ta
I said it as a quip in conversation and jotted it down in my (never-leave-home-without-it) notebook intending to write it up into a poem, then found that it felt fully finalised.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
scribbler
Tue, 2014-10-21 22:33
too bad
there are so few real eyes
weirdelf
Tue, 2014-10-21 23:13
even worse,
that so many are kept willfully shut.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Esker
Tue, 2014-10-21 23:34
The idea of a voice is to be heard
The Idea of eyes is to be seen
hearing is saying
and seeing is ....
aha! I dont know...
I like this...Its an internal and external
logic gate! We Unsee so much
as we are supposed too
for me anyway...
Stating....
in an illusionary world
I like the poem elf!
believe it or not I have many
who do not Unsee!!
Thank You!
Esker
Tue, 2014-10-21 23:36
We dont have a voice..
I know many that feel this way..
others say Silence will allow you to See...
that kind of logic too...philosophy
and we have no voice...
but I think we do....
We speak and we assume
we are not heard
but people listen
People see
more then we know
and can assume
to not know
weirdelf
Wed, 2014-10-22 00:09
well put sir,
wise, insightful
and thank you
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
raj
Wed, 2014-10-22 15:03
Jess
This is truly a gem of a thought which also has a phonetic grace. Good that you jotted it down and posted it hear.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
wesley snow
Wed, 2014-10-22 19:03
Call the people at Hallmark.
There may be a buck in this one.
Nah.
Too real to realize two real eyes.
W. H. Snow
A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley
Learn how, teach others.
The NeoPoet Mentor Program
http://www.neopoet.com/mentor/about
weirdelf
Wed, 2014-10-22 19:14
Suggesting a poem of mine to Hallmark?
Men have died for less, screaming with sharp things in their eyes. The 'nah' saved you. [grins].
Ta.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Ian.T
Wed, 2014-10-22 19:25
Jess
I didn't real eyes
Or Understand
Not Under Stand
Understand is the floor
Understand??
Quite a quaint quip there young Elf,
makes us think and it hurts,
Where's those bloody pills.
Loves yu, Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
Frost Smith
Fri, 2014-10-24 17:32
Interesting you would opt for
Interesting you would opt for realise instead realize and with three lines you are able to condemn a farce. Would like to see this expanded upon into full blown satiracal stanzas but enjoyed the dagger like quick quip, cheers
p.s. the drop bears aint got me yet old frined
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 00:50
Good to see you Frost,
that is just Anglo vs American spelling, Aussies use Anglo.
Yes, it was my original intention to use it as the base for a longer poem, however it just felt complete when I wrote it down.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Rula
Sat, 2014-10-25 10:15
thumbs up!
good one in so few words. My cup of tea of late, but don't ;et Wes know :) (more grins)
❤❤❤❤❤❤
Please follow me on Instagram https://instagram.com/poetry.jo?igshid=YmMyMTA2M2Y=
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 10:25
I genuinely laugh out loud
there is room in the world of poetry for the very short and the very long, Wes claims to have learned from me and I have certainly learned from him.
Thank you, Rula.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 11:16
I am not talking to you
until you admit who your oft referred to father is.
If I got it first guess, just say so. You know that though we fought often we respect each other.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 11:56
a genuine grin on my face
it was you playing games, not me.
I respect your dad enormously. We fought like cats and dogs when we first met, probably because we are such similar ratbags.
Ok, all communication between us now is just about your poetry.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 12:55
you would be most welcome.
It will start as soon as Wesley's "A Study In Pink" is finished.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
wesley snow
Sat, 2014-10-25 15:52
It is finished.
Get to work.
W. H. Snow
A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds. Percy Bysshe Shelley
Learn how, teach others.
The NeoPoet Mentor Program
http://www.neopoet.com/mentor/about
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 16:29
I have submitted the syllabus to you and Stan
awaiting corrections and suggestions.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
BettyBuff
Sat, 2014-10-25 18:45
The Eyes Have It!
"Ayes" ....as in "the ayes have it"...In Parliament, meaning Yes!
'Nuff said.
Ells x
Ian.T
Sat, 2014-10-25 19:05
Jess
I with you have travelled around
Now I would like to break new ground.
A limerick is what this is all about
I shall try my best my dear Elf
Put my name down, it's lonely on the shelf.
Yours, Ian..
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
weirdelf
Sat, 2014-10-25 19:07
All welcome
It will be a quick workshop,
one submission each.
More if you like, I'm not Tony Abbott
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry