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Love In the moonlight I see your sparkling face
In the moonlight I see your sparkling face
I recollect yours such a charming smile
Where can anyone love so tender ever trace
Except in your romance all my while
The candle light flickers tonight
All fire burns me out like a forest
But still I will keep it aright
When I think of you being so modest
Champagne we shall have so free
All will also enjoy some water of coconut
Candy will be served along with tea
For those who love to have salted peanut
Love and my heart shall rejoice
Tenderness and tears would be your choice
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
only love poemy not sonnetry don't count syllables
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Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
raj
Mon, 2014-09-29 01:36
Lovedly
I know not much about Sonnets, but I found this to be a very tender poem.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
raj
Mon, 2014-09-29 01:38
Deleted being a repeat post
Deleted being a repeat post
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Mon, 2014-09-29 02:38
Thank u raj
ur reading it is enough pat on my back thanks friend
Rula
Mon, 2014-09-29 03:53
An appealing piece
indeed. Yet the form of the sonnet is very strict re meter.
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lovedly
Mon, 2014-09-29 20:23
maiden attempt
do read it with eyes closed
as in Braille
then along with my sonnet
you shall sail
emeka ozurumba
Mon, 2014-09-29 06:15
i love this piece............
i love this piece............... maestro
lovedly
Mon, 2014-09-29 09:57
thank you so much
I'm happy it meets the sonnets needs
lovedly
Thu, 2021-04-15 12:53
thanks for old times sake
do comment oldest sonnet mine
lovedly
Wed, 2022-02-09 14:41
you all wanted to read my soonetry
my first sonnet
scribbler
Wed, 2022-02-09 17:05
Hi loved
the thing about sonnets is the number count of syllable in each line is supposed to be the same. This is the main reason I stopped trying to write them. This is a nice poem but from my understanding it's not a sonnet
lovedly
Wed, 2022-02-09 18:25
you are abs right Stan
read it as a sonnetry poetry
syllables I will learn after another century
lol
lovedly
Mon, 2022-04-11 19:42
Can someone help improve
this poem as a sonnet
minus the count of syllables