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    A winged figure flies alone.Searching for the one he calls his own.Softly whispering to the girl of his dreams,sitting there on the rock by the stream…

 

 …She looks into the crystal depths,where past ,present,and future is kept.In her mind memories drift in and out.She listens now to someone else’s shouts…

 

 …A winged figure stands alone,watching his love in a pain of her own…

 

 …The pain of seeing and knowing.The years of heartache are showing.The lines etched in her face are deep,and her violet eyes are troubles keep…

 

 …But the fire burns within her still.It gives her hope and strengthens her will…

 

 …She prefers to be alone these days,secluded in her forest maze.The visions aren’t so bad out here.The silence helps to keep her mind clear.
But there is one thing she doesn’t understand.Why the visions don’t come with the strange meloncholy man?A striking figure who moves with grace,always a sad smile upon his face.
He visits her sometimes at night.Then disappears as if he took flight.But she doesn’t question where he’s from.She tends to feel lighter when he comes.
A little of the burden is lifted.He says she’s not cursed but gifted.He seems to feel her pain as if it were his own.A kindred spirit,maybe,perhaps she’s not alone.

 

 

 

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Submitted by JFowles0212 on 26 October 2007 - 5:24pm.

Wow

I really like this poem, it reminds me of the way I first felt when I read Phantom of the Opera. Bittersweet.

Submitted by HiFlyGuy on 29 October 2007 - 2:56pm.

Gentle and Breezy

It shows great promise. I like how it transitions from one character to the other. Their shared sense of struggle but in a “soul mate” kind of way.