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Will you write a crappy poem already so I can critique it?! *laughs* I feel bad that there is so much suffering in your country. Was watching a documentary about Afghanistan (I know you’re in Nigeria) about how horrible things are, and how poorly women are treated, etc, and it’s just sickening. I hope conditions improve and that there can be peace. Touching write.

~Jess
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“I hope no one asks me to show them the ropes; I have no idea where they are. Maybe I can pull some strings and find out….” - George Carlin

Love is being stupid together. ~Paul Valery

Nicely done. Well written and very powerful. There is a point behind this, which I find to be lacking in many writes, even in my own at times. Great job

Infinite_Dwarf,

I have a lots of crappy poems in my file, some of them can’t come out good no matter how I try to polish them. I am afraid of what will happen when the down side of creativity sets in and I start putting them on stream. when those hard criticism come I will simply run for cover. (smiles) No, I will not run, I joined this site to improve on my poems and I am getting that already. Feel free to give me a helping hand. I need it. Sometime, it is good to detatch oneself from ones work in order to get a better view. My lecturer once said that a creative work has life of its own and should be appreciated as an entity seperate from the source. He then said, once a book is written, a poem or piece of art is created, the author is dead. Do you agree? In all, thank you very much for stopping by to read and for your comments. Cheers and best wishes.

I don’t believe you ever wrote a crappy poem. I will have to think about what your lecturer said. I am not sure if I agree or not. It is one of those things like if a tree falls in the forest and there is no one to hear, does it make a sound. I have heard good arguments on both sides of that question. Although I do agree what we create takes on a life of it’s own.

Our sons are sent forth for destruction. So pitifully true.

Sadly there is so much truth in your words, to make matters worse, the west is
conditioned by media backouts, unless it has a baring or a financial concern,
or there is extreme famine, we are only fed topical concerns,
Let’s hope the day of justice comes soon, Loved your account,
although painfully true, But true has a price as well,
Take care…..and Very Best Regards,
Peter
~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

This poem tears at my heart. I have meet some people recently from
close to Kenya, and I have heard about their houses being set on fire with the
people in them. This is pure evil. Some have escaped, but to be away from
their country and they have had to deal with language barriers, isolation,
loss of family. My heart goes out to you. I wish the wicked would flee.
recently got together with a group from that country. I love the accent,
the faith, and strength I have seen. And correct me if I am wrong, but the
trouble they say is from people that have taken refuge in the country.
terrible. We in the United States are very grateful for what we have.
I am not rich, but I appreciate my freedom.

sincerely,
Patty

This is so true,touching and down to earth,what more can I say ?Thank you

Thank you for stopping by to read. Best wishes.

Jess K. was right, there is nothing to critique here. You have a voice like a lion with the gentleness of Gandhi.

You bring more than awareness of your countries plight, you bring a form of poetry that reaches peoples souls.

I am envious.

I think it is your personal compassion combined with direct honesty that makes your poetry so great.

Anyone un-affected needs immediate medical attention. Their heart has stopped.

cheers,
Jess