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Zyzzyva

could it be a testicle
like cotton buds
from the penis flower

a witched river
under dark clouds
of brooms that don't fly anymore
maybe in need of an upgrade

perhaps a spell of weaponized winds
with insinuated floating ghouls
shaking their lopsided claws
under blood orchards
and diagrams of grief
as they follow their noses
looking for pussy

pussies; the scent of vivacious
zyzzyva
loving oozing laughter
thirsty skin
needles too
cunt heroine stuck on toe picket fences
mimicry of ducks blood butter
like a crime scene of kisses that went to far
eggs and runny yokes left puddled on a thigh
the uterus burps Pans milkshake
sex legacy legs
lookin for love

auto asphyxiated in a closet fringy and hanging with a hardon
lost eyes and drool
somewhere in Thailand
after spicy noodle soup
and a Tsingtao

hurt me
hurt you
i'm an evil boweval
a Zyzzyva come to love you

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good , bad like sex sorta. So much bad and little good.
Like you say "hurt me hurt you. There are those that get pleasure from inflicting pain and those who get pleasure from pain inflicted. That's real !
The closet stanza brings to mind poor Robin W. I miss that guy's humor.
This seems a certain upgrade from you.
Title is unique far as I can see.
A smooth read
The beginning and ending fit well together
Another brutally upfront exploration from you. It is more a thinking observance or dream (sort of) than what most could relate to I believe. i believe most things to do with sex are of an affectionate nature but there is a dark side and you master writing about that.
Later,

~Mark~

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Well if your twisted in a certain kind of way then the negatives become positives
The dark and the light strangely mix the brew of the voluptuous and sensual with a bit of terror to make it all the more spicy. A good ground for writing shock eroticism as I am a fan of it both in literature and life

'Taboo and Transgression reflect two contradictory urges. The taboo would forbid the transgression but the fascination compels it"
Georges Bataille from Eroticism Death and Sensuality

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At first I thought it a made up word and needed to check it afterwards.
That title would throw anyone off especially me Ha!
Man , where you get your ideas...you should write a book on how you get them lol
Later,

~Mark~

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