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In Your Spreading Warmth (for Steven)

In Your Spreading Warmth
(for Steven)

tender years
remembered
tempered by those tears
that streamed from
my gray-blue eyes
when skies were heavily laden
with rain soaked clouds
which poured
upon a naked head
that wished to be
safely inside
within a warm bed
once again with you
in your inner circle
so soon again
I'll fight time and tide
to be forever
at your side
to embrace the ending
of the fading day
in your spreading warmth.

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o embrace the ending
of the fading day
in our spreading warmth.

I'm glad you liked it!

*hugs, Cat

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deserves to be told to the world! I can see riding on the motorcycle, rain pouring down and wishing that you were home in bed with your husband! The blankets drawn up around you and he, and the warmth of his body warming yours. [Spreading Warmth] I think that the story flows well and the rhythm of it is like the hum of the bike on the road. Well used words, but are not cliche to describe your happiness and contentment. Excellent! Hugs from the boys, ~ Geez.
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although we each had our own motorcycles, I loved being his passenger. holding on with my thighs, with my head on his back and my hands either in my lap, or gently on his waist. it's funny that you should mention rain... we honeymooned in Canada, taking both bikes (stupid idea) we went to a campsite to sleep. when we woke up in the middle of the night, it was raining so hard it felt like we were floating down stream! quickly, we packed up the bikes and drove to a motel. then hauled our drenched items to a near by laundromat. then back to the motel with a bottle of *Jack Daniel's, and singing all the worst Rock & Roll songs from the 60's that we could think of! the next day it stopped raining and. the heat became almost unbearable. it is the first time I drove, wearing short cutoffs and a halter top. the heat coming off our engines was visible (swimming!) we hit a wall of heat in Duluth on our way back (we lived in Minnesota then out in the boonies) we stopped for a beer that had lakefront access. and went straight into the lake, then we got a beer!

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to this one well, [not the honeymoon part, my second wife wouldn't ride, I didn't have a bike with the first one and my present wife wouldn't either, because she had been in an accident. The rain though! I used my motorcycle as a primary means of transportation for most of about ten years, so you know I rode in a lot of rain! I stopped riding with the first snow and resumed after the last of the snow was gone. I liked the laundromat part and the drinking of Jack and singing, those parts were also very familiar! I went to Laconia N.H. for the bike races and camped out on the grounds with a bunch of my friends three years in a row. Kind of like Sturgis! This was a great reminder of those times and was really authentic! Great job!
~ Hugs from the boys, ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

I'm so sorry that your wives wouldn't ride with you...it is their big loss. they missed out on something very special and magical. nothing like roaring down the road, leaning into the curves all with the wind in your face. ( I did have a windshield though.) it still makes my heart beat a little stronger, when I think about it! I'm glad I have the memories! did you ride with buddies or a club? someone to share it with? we rode with the WBMC (the west bank motorcycle club) and of course I drove the bike for two years to NEI (Northwestern Electronic Institute) in Minnesota. I rode from late March to mid November. the rest of the time I drove a Pontiac GTO (turquoise and black.)

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we had a small loose group that we called the Torrington Terrors! Not really so terrible, and about 15 or so, but mostly just a bunch that got together to ride. Most times, just two or three of us, and when we rode to work, it was singly, because we all worked different places. My second wife's brother George, [who taught me to ride] my dear friend of fifty years, Lew, who recently passed, our friend Mark and a guy named, Red. Most of the others were hard-core bikers from down South, who just showed up every now and then unannounced; "Hey wanna go to...?" I miss riding a lot. Still have my bike stored at a friend's place and if I ever win the lottery, will have it restored! If not, it goes to the friend who has promised he will restore it and learn to ride. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
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if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
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are you capable of doing the work yourself or do you have to hire it out? maybe you could offer the guy a deal to get half price if you helped with the restoration? I miss riding too! but the years have not been kind, what with fibromyalgia and psoriatic arthritis I'm pretty well crippled. it is a pain in the @ss. and painful too.

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Have anyone to work on it. The guy I used to have, retired and gone to Florida. The Honda dealerships charge waaaaaay too much, [over a hundred dollars an hour] and it's a difficult bike to work on. They told me that they don't really care too much about working on old bikes anyway, [1985 Honda Interceptor V-Four 500cc] like the grandaddy of Interceptors. He said that they make way more money just putting new bikes together and doing minor stuff. People either don't know how to work on it or want nothing to do with it. Yeah, I could help just have to find the right person. Anyway, Thanks for the conversation about it, it helps. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

between couples creates a warm feelings but when one is absent from each other there won't be warmness. Even when you try to make use of duvet it can't solve it.
Cat, you are deeply reflecting on your early marriage bliss!

Beautiful composition Cat!

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I am always at my happiest when he is near. I can't see a future without him...I made him promise to let me die first! thank you for your response, it is greatly appreciated!

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Wow! I see endless love from your side. Your love for him is so strong.

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

we are still in-love, after all this time! thank you for your comment

>{^*;*^}< *hugs, Cat

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if maybe there is a; "Motorcycle Repair For Dummies Book" out there somewhere?

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