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On Your Knees...
The night creeps in
on hands and knees
too ashamed to face the day
It gives no clue
of why it cries
if it knows, it wouldn't say
It brings the nightmares
and with it Darkside
pulled from within your shell
Full of teeth and claws
to rip apart your dreams
and take your soul to Hell
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Structured: Western
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Comments
Geezer
Sun, 2020-01-19 19:06
Thanks Jerry...
Glad you liked it, but not that you suffer so. Thanks again, Geezer.
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-01-19 14:36
THE night
is a life's shadow
it keeps coming and does go
you Gee
also know
this poem of yours
overshadows
Geezer
Sun, 2020-01-19 19:09
Yes, shadows chase me...
and I never know enough to just wake up! I panic and run! Thanks for stopping by lovedly.~ Gee.
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There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
Edna Sweetlove
Mon, 2020-01-20 11:33
AAAARRRRGGGGHHHH!!!!
More horrors and hideousity! More vampires, ghosts and ghouls! I see I shall have to contribute to this dark genre.
xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars