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You Must Have Looked Good

You must have looked so good when you were young!

You still have shapely legs,
high cheekbones,
sparkling eyes,
a mischievous smile,
a neat figure,
slim neck,
strong shoulders...

You must have looked so good, but I can't remember you
as your were, unless, too occasionally,
I take down a photo album from its dusty shelf,
and there you are in your young glory,
making me feel that other men
must have envied me then
and perhaps they do now!

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All I can say after reading this post is that his is a very innocent and honest acknowledgement of the elements of love which made the chemistry work for you... I appreciate your humility in doing so without male chauvinism... i liked it for sure...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

this rather simple poem. It certainly seems to sum up my wife's enduring beauty, for me at least.
Best wishes,
Robert.

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but too much use of'''' the'''
lessons the charm
no harm
edit with ur own arm

don't mind me
I comment
like cement

for your comment, which is not really as hard as cement. Repetition is a useful tool when writing poems, but is easily overused. I have modified this poem following your advice.
Best wishes,
Robert.

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