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You make me recall (read Hayanaku below later....)

you make me recall

when i was out on my own
out of my teens
in search of someone unique
I saw her in the Plaza

We stared

none had the guts to approach the other
she was like Venus
and
I a lost bull in the jungle
but the look left an imprint on my mind
till today

and as a guy did say
I posted the snap
hers only
on both side of the Plaza
hoping she would do similarly
but sad
I couldn't make it

May be some day I will

thanks for the rejoinder
but by now MISSISSIPPI
must have emptied......

Late
night hangover
head banged wall

you
came over
knocked me out

question
remains clever
why did you

A Hayanaku is like sunku
but
1 2 and 3
words
as above

Style / type: 
Free verse
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We stared.
This is the shortest love story i ever heard.
The ending feels unrelated though.

IRiz

over our eyes
how long these can hold

time is just a glimpse
many stories untold

we just blink
and
she along with that minuscule time
does sink
&
has G O N E
left one forlorn

develop on ths poyaum

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