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The Yield of my Bequeathal

To my parents I give crazy "props"
for putting up with me,

they provided great examples
which gave me integrity.

I also thank my siblings
for when push came down to shove,

they made me a better person
each combining to teach me, love;

and from then on I was willing
to share myself with all my friends,

giving me true substance
instead of following the trends;

which made all the difference
in the way I shared my heart,

had I better learned my lessons
my loves with me would not have part.

But, to God I leave my legacy
and in my heart of hearts I'd pray,

I lived for all a good example
by leading no one else astray.

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Structured: Western
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Something very prevalent on my "secret mind", that not only had to be clarified.......but, very importantly and explicitly HAD to be said....before 'twas too late. Everybody SING, now! I love all of your collective lives.......individually, AND together! Thanx for making my pen "twitch"! docmaverick.
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Comments

Real people make their own choices of goodness and integrity.

Doc, when will you stop writing Hallmark poems?.

cheers,
Jess
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