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first of all
rest in peace brothers

but this is not a poem
this is my heartache
and I want u all to reason with me

the gentility of a lion does not mean stupidity
you should cut your coat according to your size-

enough blood had been shed
and is like your fathers didn't educate you enough
or history is lacking behind
these same NIGERIANS that delivered you from apartheid

is now bush meats
not worthy of life
but rest assured this is an act of war

I rest my case

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Very strong statement Political poetry and propaganda (which is a neutral word) have a way of connecting. I think the very passionate appeal here works.

Sadly we in the US have so much daily chatter with our Idi Amin in power here we miss what’s happening in your world. What was it prompted this poem?

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Ok, firstly from a purely literary point of view - this is a brilliant write - filled with fire and passion of belief in what you stand for - which is a great trait and quality.

Yet, this I will say with the utmost respect and humility - take care the words used - especially on a topic of this nature when it is so close to the heart of so many residing in and out of South Africa.

I am South African born - and it saddens me to see what is happening to our beautiful country. Deeply. Yet, that being said - the fault many are making is to paint a nation with the same brush based on the actions of a ruthless and lawless minority who are self entitled enough to cause others harm and call it national pride when burning, pillaging and destroying another's hard earned possessions and self respect.

Not all South Africans condone Xenophobia in any way, shape or form and we would appreciate sensitivity to this subject as a people and a nation who are in the throes of emotional chaos this day.

SO, in closing - yes voice your thoughts - it's a time of free speech - but bare in mind - the pen is mightier than the sword in a big way - especially on topics of this nature and to say - "but rest assured this is an act of war" is a fruitless sentiment that will just bring more of the same - unnecessary violence and pain to two nations already struggling with so much.

Having lived the past two days with nothing but negativity and uncertainty it is with great respect and no offence meant to you that I ask we approach this topic with a little more tact and sensitivity. As we can make a world of difference with our words - so lets do so with positivity and hope.....

Yours respectfully in script

Let life be your muse in all you do!!!

Nigeria and South Africa had gone a long way, for your people to now treat us like this we are like brothers and sisters before.

If black can treat fellow black like this then what will I say

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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