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THE WRATH (pandemic).

My soul's bleeding
And heart almost melted
The spirit is shedding tears
And eyes are seeing too much
Yet ears are echoing
With the cry of the world
The wind roars fire
Tension soar higher

Like a mother hen
Which vow to fight for its chicks
With the strength of feathers
That's it weapons
Though it has nothing more

We are prisoners
Imprisoned in our homes
By the flying venom
Spreading rapidly
Reaping souls unnaturally
Though the night might be long
But surely the sunlight comes
Hope is a strength for freedom.

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How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Let us all take responsibility for this deadly virus and do the necessaries to fight it together.
Editing stage: 

Comments

this is a fight for all of us. Even sitting home, will help to fight this war. ~ Geezer.
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Thanks for your commitment it's so encouraging

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perfect

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

Surely critique is family culture.

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Surely critique is family culture.

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my heart almost melt may I suggested my heart almost melted
your use of my in the first stanza is somewhat redundant
even so your first stanza is very powerful

it amazes me how this pandemic has spread all over the world
good writing you brought your point across very well

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Rough work sometimes we make silly mistakes that's normal for writers but we still edits them and I will surely do it.
Thanks for your suggestion I love it so much cause it's cool.

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Please can you make me understand the "fact" you are talking about?

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i only asked that you should make me understand what what you meant.

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