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WORLD PEACE

When will the world know this?
The world know what?
Head sitting on its neck,
Without rolling.
Starvation for vultures.
or a Kilo of peace.

If it has a price
My gold will stand
My silver too
Even the life that sleeps in my gentle heart
Oh Allah, oh Christ,
oh Buddha, all GODS
take a fight

Let peace visit the world
Let Unity Visit too
White and Black
Caucasoid and Negroid
I mean world peace.

Give chocolate to soldier
Food to the thugs
No synthetic missiles and bombs
like Trump and North Korea
crafting Armageddon

Forget the power
Forget the race
Forget the religion
Let peace reign

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I long to see a world of no killing, a world of love, a world of no race, i want peace.
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Comments

Me too and the good thing is we
are not alone, the bad thing is we
are not in charge.
Love the "chocolate to soldiers",
maybe that's what we should make
bullets out of lol.

thanks for posting, enjoyed the read.

the moon man

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

author comment

I seriously hope that one day soon there'll be peace in this world

Yes I do very much agree the gods should stay put in their heavens, they've done enough damage to humanity since the dawn of time. So I think you might have meant "take a flight" as opposed to a "fight"
I too have written similar poems, as have many. It feels good to write and share the hope of peace. As to their effectiveness, not such a high score. And in the highly militarized world we live in, it is unlikely giving candy to the solders will do much. But who are the soldiers? They are young men like you with their own lives and dreams.
The only ray of hope I see is your generation and those to follow are now connected in ways never imagined and perhaps a new humanity will evolve which actually does practice peace. It is urgent that the young organize and make their presence heard in peaceful protest and VOTING for the best to emerge from the pack. Our leaders are US, just people not gods, which are imperfect. We must compromise and never again, (at least here in the USA) not be engaged in politics and allow a totally wicked animal like Trump to gain power. It is along road, but all the peacenicks have to also be involved with the politics and stand up to the forces of war and murder who rule the world.

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

well noted

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

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A heart felt call for world peace.The world definitely would be a haven if peace could reign.

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