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World to Change

Submitted by Shelby Pryor on Wed, 2023-02-01 11:11

This world is getting darker by the day
I want to help but I don't know what to say
Those who used to stand side by side
Have let their little differences divide

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It is time to put all our differences on hold
We're losing the battle, the case is getting cold
We may not see eye to eye, but we all know
We're all done for if we don't give this a go

So now it's time for all to stand shoulder to shoulder
It's the only way we'll survive as the world gets colder
I believe this is a pattern we the people can rearrange
So are you with me or not? We've got a World to Change

Style / type:

Structured: Western

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Editing stage:

Editing - polished draft

Contest:

Neopoem Of The Week January 29th to February 4th 2023

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Wed, 2023-02-01 12:37

I think that...

many people would take this as a call to action by specific groups. I, on the other hand, will say that it is a call to all the inhabitants of this little speck of dust in the cosmos. Nice job, it sounds like the blurb at the beginning or the end of a movie like Star Wars. ~ Geezer.
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Shelby Pryor

Wed, 2023-02-01 14:48