I would drop all the 'the's in the first and third stanzas
I would also make satellite pleural,

and I would drop the lines
'Call it man made'
'mostly by men'
as well as 'the world came in with it' (it doesn't make sense to me )

I would also drop your first line, and use the one further down - 'all the glory' to begin the write

I stress that this is my opinion only, and may have missed something in there that you may be saying

an interesting write
Love judy
xxx