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Words are like the birds

Words are just like the birds.
They always flitter and fly
to ones ears
Then they
pick peck .
And try
to pry
an idea into
the world of why .

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I like this, its brevity at its best.

Obi.

Thank you

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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I'm a fan of brevity in poetry - the challenge of saying so much with just enough words to deliver the message without clutter, while enhancing the impact of your writing vision. When using so few words it is very important to get them all right. I really like the message of your poem - well done!

Reading several of your published poems, and the comments about them, I would strongly suggest looking at their structure, and how they might benefit from the use of breaking your thoughts into separate stanzas. This can help guide the reader through your poem's journey more effectively. After all, we want to draw the reader into the world of our poem. Here is a good article on the subject:

https://poets.org/glossary/stanza

Here's an example incorporating stanzas using your words:

Words are just like the birds.
They always flitter and fly
to one's ears

They pick and peck
and try to pry an idea
into the world of why

Good stuff - keep writing!

Best

Michael Anthony

" into the world of why" a most excellent ending

What they said! ~ Geez.
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I’ll try it takes a long time to get an idea because I have adhd and anxiety

Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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