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Wood Nymphs
What light is this in striated beam?
comes peeking through the silvered clouds
on this night so dark,yet warm
Where comes the sound of waters stilled
that alone the call of a night owls shriek
echoes through forests of old
The gentle brushing of wood nymphs wings
a contrast to calloused skin
may invite you to a dreamland
where only you and they may go
Erase the bitter taste of bile
with the nectar of the night
arise upon soft gossamer wings
let them take you on their flight
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lovedly
Sun, 2020-05-17 04:29
and this Lynn
is like music
on a darkened blackened
yet golden moon struck night
o what a delight
c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-05-17 06:58
awww
Thank you for that. Now I am blushing
Chrys
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author commentc lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-05-17 06:56
Teddy
Thank you so kindly
Chrys
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author commentc lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-05-17 08:07
Alan
I don't think I was going for metre however let me disgest this after my second cup of coffee. I'm sure all of your suggestions are correct
* Alan have used your suggestions and it does read better thank you
Yes we are still friends isn't that what this site is for
Chrys
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author commentGeezer
Sun, 2020-05-17 07:42
I will leave...
the more technical stuff for those that remember all the rules and of how they apply. Your grasp of the forest at night, is phenomenal. I have been in the forest at night to hunt and I felt that you could be sitting along side of me, watching and waiting for the prey. Nice job. ~ Gee.
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c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-05-17 07:54
Gee
thank you. Maybe it was the gossamer wings you felt Now to study sir Alan's hard work
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author commentc lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-05-17 12:40
Jerry
I thank you so much. I wasn't thinking about old William as I was never fond of his witing. Oh dear now me I am in trouble for saying that.
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author commentc lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-05-18 08:13
jerry
ah well lol
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author commentLavender
Sun, 2020-05-17 11:18
Magical
Hello, Chrys,
Like Jerry, the first stanza reminded me of Romeo, and then your poem went to a level of magical delight. Thank you for this captivating journey!
L
c lynn brooks
Sun, 2020-05-17 12:43
lavendar
thank you so much. I appreciate your very kind words
Chrys
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