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womb to tomb
womb to tomb
then a morn came
another zygote became….
a partner to produce many more
life so continued
as we basked in
sunrises and sunsets…
at a memorable distance
the birds did flee
there became a larger gap
between you and me
till one day,
neither you nor I could see
we were both at sea…
a distant horizon now beckoned me
come dear one now be one with glee,
I sailed along with the surf
there was no way to brave the turf
silently we merged with eternity
sand filled bags of memories
time did continue to fly
along with me
none could now see
twas the birth of spirituality
a long distanced desire,
when I was young
now in the heavens alone
like a balloon,
Lifelessly lone-somely strung
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Seren
Fri, 2013-04-19 07:58
Loved
you went dream walking when you wrote this one I rather liked some of it, I think it could be a much better cutting some lines down would improve the flow
love JC x
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
loved
Fri, 2013-04-19 08:36
IMPROVE THE FLOW
you please do show
thanks
loved