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Wolves,Trains And Yellow Roses

I heard a wolf cry out at night
then hugged the blanket round me tight
this was not done out of fright
only that he reminded me of you

I heard a freight trains whistle whine
as it pushed through the darkness
of another time
while the surrounding mist
echoed it's shadowed rhyme

I felt the emptiness of another life
plagued with continuous heartache and strife
memories clinging to every thought
and you lit upon my life

I saw a yellow rose in a field of thorns
the wind blew cold and sang forlorn
a question arising of who this could be
the answer awaiting reality
the yellow rose
was always me

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Yellow I know it is misspelled but I cannot edit the title for some strange reason can anyone help?
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another one of you powerful and beautiful writes, I like all your stanza's very much but the second one really struck me, in every stanza you have a magnificent amount of imagery. I feel the pain of missing someone. Your title is really wonderful and a yellow rose in my opinion is a rare and represents encouragement and love toward others.

You have a typo in the second line of the last stanza (cold) I also see you are having problems editing your title. Maybe try logging off for a couple of minutes then log back on, My computer works much better than my phone.

Thank you...Teddy

not all of my poems are about my late husband this was written for a dear friend of mine

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Now this is a funny typo. I visualize me standing outside having to dodge fish lmao. Now , last line second stanza...try shadowy instead of shadowed and see if you like it better

Dear lynn, another of your lovely, full of brilliant imagery poems. Yellow roses are so deftly included in your poem, I'm full of admiration. You have some spellos, but they've already been pointed out.
Enjoyed and will return, hope you can edit, I thought it was on purpose...lol.
Best, Gracy

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thank you I fixed what I could for reason cannot edit the title will keep trying

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very lovely; clearly written and clearly understood. Well done. Jerry

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Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving such a nice compliment

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Another quality piece from your pen(cil).
Apostrophe has found its way from stanza 2, L.1. 'trains (should be train's) and jumped to stanza 2, L.5 it's (should be its). A small thing though...
Are you trying to edit your title in the title box or trying to edit the bold type at the top of the editing page (you need to be in the title box)? ~ just a thought.

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well hello stranger thank you so much coming from you it is appreciated

the bold title I have tried everything with no luck

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