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Witness
Alas, Winters black and bitter wine
Stains the chins of Dionysus children
His gaze pales the grapes upon the vine
Their frozen faces, witness, the chorus of oblivion
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Frenchf
Sat, 2013-02-16 14:38
Didn't like wine and vine
Didn't like wine and vine rhyme but otherwise interesting concept