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withstood......my first unread poem over years

1.
the kiss
lips are divine
they are fine
but none on earth
can lips
of my kind
ever find

I wear no mask
for I love my task
just kiss me
like a fairy

and see

how love flows
from my lips to thee

this kiss was lovely
didn’t you see?

a newbe Neopoet’s kiss
absolutely free

no2.
is an add on comment

none glossed it yet
since a year had lapsed

still i so present
as I wash out old linen

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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DEL

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DEL

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They still think it stands
it did
when one was young
even in imagination
one could
and
as later in dreams
it would
on the dance floor,
forever it stood,
till one got married
and
it tarried and parried
as times’ test it withstood.
later on,
on one night stands,
it often did
as one,
oneself did hide
ere one went for a jolly ride,
it was always on the other's side.

later one stands along a lonely tree,
hopefully it would
and
some passer by perhaps
see it,
one should
ere one passes away,
hope it does stay
within one we all pray
and
it stands once in a way,
ere they perish and pass away.

hopefully it will stand
the test of time,
as it does so
in poetic parlance,
it would have withstood
the test of time
and say,
yes it stood.

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DEL

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so i must thank u man
and hope you too shall read poems
as many as you can
thanx

hope ur a man
if a woman
i amend my stand
for man read woman
and vice versa

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this is a nice little free flowing piece of free verse. (which I love) I will not disect it for it stands alone!

with much appreciation, Cat

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And responds, please be courteous
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Cat ....I was rather ...am reviewing the many poems posted here
over the past over an year
and I found none had read this
and so I thought let it now
Stand!!!

Glad you came by
and withstood
Thanks Cat

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There are a few pieces here in your comments and the actual write it being in two parts, sometimes I jot down useful pieces on my notebook (Comp one) this is how this reads a few jots of useful words to be used to create one or two pieces.
Your themes are fine now let the finished item rhyme,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

you define poetry of mine
those were the initial years
I knew not what>>>

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Set your quill to write and edit mode , then make for us a lovely piece of your work from those you have shown us here,
Take care young Bard we await your strokes of inked quill.
Yours Ian.T
PS:- I expect some of my early jottings were terrible but I blame it on being young and I can't remember that far back, lol..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I am trying to view my oldies here
some have never been read at all
some i shall refresh
others edit as
IAN says

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There's little doubt the sweetness of a lover's kiss nor the sourness within a politician's lol. Hopefully you can avoid the latter...................stan

sweet so sweet not sour
still!

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