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WITHIN ME

Thoughts flows deeply within me,
a sincere silence now sounding,
now making me a wave length,
the tides of words now lifting up.

my brain is studiously working out,
closing my eyes to rest becomes,
a transportation to my creativity,
I'm solely left behind in my own self.

often times quietude enhances me,
to take a smooth voyage of my brain,
but to explore my mental boundary,
a mental energy is first harnessed.

now i am gradually reaping in peace,
a melodious song playing out in me,
my rage is finally erased from me,
my thoughts are now a thrilling ride.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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Hello Jackweb!
For me, reading this poem is an experience in meditation. A journey is calming, connecting and enjoying peace. Wonderful final line!
Thank you!
L

You finally nailed it. Thank you so much for reading through.
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"Poetry is invariably imbued with a sense of calm and serenity".

~Jackweb

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