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As WINTERS BLUR

Through the distant bare limbed trees,
all white with frost this winter day
the sun peeks with the slightest tease
blinking the last of night away.

A few doves rocket through the gelid sky
bound somewhere to break their fast.
For them speed limits don't apply.
I wave at them and then they're passed.

Clouds of breath drift toward the south
propelled by the barest chilly breeze
then I breathe tasting winter in my mouth
here where the field abuts old trees.

Then with a blink of time and eyes
the scene becomes tinted pale green
with pollen flavoring warm blue skies
during this season of in between.

Another blink and air turns hot
with woodlands curtained in deep green,
sweat drips from my nose like thinned snot
as I watch wild turkeys putt and preen.

I turn my head, quickly look back
as foliage burns with autumn's blaze
seen as dawn begins to crack
and the distant song of a hound plays.

Eyes to the sky then I look down
at jackfront underneath my boot
here a few miles out of town
as winter once again takes root.

Then the blinks and shutter snaps
all speed up as the years go by
in a life lived beyond most maps.
I know it's trite but the years fly.

Until here I am at the same place
the woods still old, the field now pines
which I lean against needing a brace
and ponder about life's designs
then shuffle off with an uneven pace
hoping one more winter, at least, to face.

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Hi Stan
Not just one more but several winters you will face. I loved the clever use of "blinks" to create the effect of transition. Of course you are adept at creating imagery with your magical use of words and rhyme which are your forte. Certainly a strong contender for the contest, even though I knowyou write more out of love of poetry than for the sake of contests.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Thank you. I am pleased you found this poem worthy of a read. Alas, since I'm still contest director (Jonathan will be taking that burden come January) i am not eligible to win. Have a great new year and thanks for the visit............stan

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for a poem...but I have to say this fine poem might be better presented in that season, or at least after we are not bathing in the glory of our early summer. At least the the very "in the moment" reality of internet poetry sites. I'm not sayin' poetry is like clothes. but in most places in the planet it's summertimesummertime sum sum summer time, and the trees are not bare, so it's hard to wrap my head with a winter poem. Live like winter is far away, my friend! And ye shall survive many a winter to come!

Eumolpus
I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

One of the reasons I brought this one out of storage is to give myself and others a break from the heat lol. (I think it was originally posted in a cool month). Appreciate your dropping by and I'll see if I can either write or recycle a warm weather poem just for you.......stan

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