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Winter’s Wish (November Contest)

With autumn’s blanket of leaves
smothered on the floor
in all their colorful glory
it’s easy to feel joy

When seasons change
the magic is in the colours
Now autumn will go to sleep
and winter will awaken

Winds blowing the trees naked
they shiver waiting for spring
but for now,
hopefully a new blanket of white
making everyone’s Christmas bright.

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A bit of joy for us all.
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I don't know that I would use the word [smothered]
I get that you were anticipating the snow covering the leaves, but
it is a bit too early as you are hoping for the snow to cover the trees
in a blanket of white. I would use the rather mundane word of [spread] out on the floor
I know that it is the expected word, but it makes more sense. ~ Geez.
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Smothering of leaves is what I meant, I'm probably not up to my usual form yet, but I hope it makes more sense now. A blanket of leaves on the floor.

Thank you...Teddy

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Lovely poem, dear Teddy. We've just had a wonderful winter and no tourists at all due to pandemic. Our province had a long, cold winter and no tourists to be had. Our province lost millions of jobs and money. It's a total disaster, not your poem...LOL
I love all of your poetry, this is especially good. The last strophe is my favourite, but that's not to say that the first one is bad. You're a great poet. dear Teddy.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I've missed you, I think you understand exactly what I was trying to say, seasons come and go regardless but this year and this new season ahead let's hope that the universe throws us all a break and we can all have some light and happiness, after what has been the very hardest of years. My love to you and I hope your foot is better. X

Thank you...Teddy

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Dear Teddy, yes, I think I understand your poem. And we certainly wish that future seasons bring us health and happiness. And no Covid!
Keep safe, best wishes, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

There is no time limit on our poetry here at neopoet, feel free to have a day with your lovely wife, enjoy other things other than the flat screen, we all are free to smell the air outside and shopping is truly therapy so never apologise . here in Tuscany we are once again in a lock down so no shopping really, only for food. Take care my dear friend, glad you enjoyed my post-surgery poem. I've been on adrenaline for a few days now, probably the happiest I've ever felt.

Thank you...Teddy

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warm and cozy piece of work... there's nothing like a winter bight Christmas

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lovely to see you, indeed its my most favourite season, warm cosy fire burning bright and a massive christmas tree, full of colour to cheer us up.

Thank you...Teddy

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Wonder time

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what you wish for Teddy ~ everything has its price.
Stanza 2, L.4, why not try 'And winter will awake(en)' ?

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Oh, that's what my dear mum used to say!
Love your thoughts and have edited. Thank you for your generosity dear Sir.

Thank you...Teddy

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What a charming little piece.

Thank you, I am so glad you found this charming. It's for the November competition, you could enter if you wish.

Thank you...Teddy

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How do I do that? I find this site rather confusing.

Look on the stream of poems to where it's announced the November contest then write your poem, it has to be in with the theme of nature and the universe, try to find it as you will have a better idea, then when you post your poem there is an option box you tick for contest and you choose which contest, in this case would be November contest 2020 I hope that helps. It's really hard on. New site but if you need any help just ask

Thank you...Teddy

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