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The Will To Fly

Don't clip my wings
for I've just learned to fly
to a soul that is restless
don't ever ask why

A fool I'd be to let this light grow dim
I answered the voice that cried from within
the hunger is deep the flames rise high
it calls out to me
let me fly ,let me fly

Give me the freedom of a bird in flight
let me take all he darkness
and turn it to light

A fool I'd be
to watch it all die
I won't let it fade to a tear and a sigh
it calls out to me
let me fly,let me fly
the hunger is deep the flames rise high

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I'd love to hear this with the music. I have taken it upon myself to imagine an angel.
The second stanza is brilliant sounds like music.

Thank you...Teddy

aww thank you so much . unfortunately the only copy I have ( at least I think I do it is a very raw copy . The clean copy went to a recording studio that never made the recording. I have several others as well

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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Hi, Chrys,
It's the will to fly, succeed, blossom, grow that is so important. Your poem conveys that very well, especially with the use of the word 'hunger' several times throughout. Great final line - I envision a Phoenix.
Thank you!
L

thank you so much! This was about my personal struggles that I was having at the time. I did set it to music that I also wrote

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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I enjoyed your inspiring poem about the immaterial force that resides in all of us. And that age old dream of loosening the clay feet, to soar in spiritual lands.

T

The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight

Thank you very much for your thoughts

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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Hi Chrys, what a lovely poem, excellent for these trying times. It's uplifting and has good rhymes all the way through. I especially like the strophe below;

Give me the freedom of a bird in flight
let me take all (t)he darkness
and turn it to light

It's a beautiful wish, may God bless us all with that Light.

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Know then thyself, presume not God to scan,
The proper study of Mankind is Man.
Plac’d on this isthmus of a middle state,
A being darkly wise, and rudely great….

An Essay On Man, III, Alexander Pope.

thank you so much

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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now that you have outgrown the precarious fledgling stage--by all means--take off like a big bird. Good luck. I like your lyrics. Good work. Jerry

many thanks I'm trying to

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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Hello again, Chrys, each time I read your poem I imagine different things. I like the idea of taking off like a large bird, as Jerry says. Enjoyed a lot. Best, Gracy

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Know then thyself, presume not God to scan,
The proper study of Mankind is Man.
Plac’d on this isthmus of a middle state,
A being darkly wise, and rudely great….

An Essay On Man, III, Alexander Pope.

thanks again actually these lyrics were written at a very difficult time in my life

Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

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