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Will of A Fighter

This earth is my battleground
where I face the demons within
to rip away the dirt that I've found
which binds me to treacherous sin.

So many voices of doubt and mockery
trying to chain me to the burden of despair
as I seek to find my own identity
by reaching for my dreams, scattered everywhere.

I have met hypocrites with poisoned tongues
who pretended to be my friends indeed
and after all the promises they have sung,
they leave me bleeding in my hour of need.

Still I cling to hope and strive to spread my wings,
never giving up the dream to embrace destiny.
For all the heartache and wounds that stings
are accompanied with lessons to transform me.

Failure reveals the weakness that I bear,
allowing me to patch the holes in my soul
so that I can rise again with hope's flare,
to return to battle with the courage I hold.

I stand tall beside my loyal brothers,
never bowing to trials and enemy
while I claim wisdom to be stronger,
a student of experience, that is me.

I may fall at another time, another day
but a real man is not a hopeless coward.
He finds his solution in his own way
and earns the right to move forward.

I will fight to build my future
until those who sneer at me
will stare in disbelieve and wonder
when I show them the best of me.

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You will in life find that a friend will stay with you always.
The others are just memories, so just make them shallow memories, so that they never make you change your ways, accept all the good and bad but learn to sort which is the good.
This is true life.
Seek out people that are on your level or above and learn the thoughts or the same, the others you can also learn but it is just how to avoid lol.
Take care young man and did you know that Digit has been to Singapore and already left to go to USA ???
Good write from your feelings, Yours Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

yeah, you did tell me about Digit except forthe going to usa part.(it's either that or it must have slipped my mind.) Quite busy preparing for the talk. If everything went well, I'll be compiling my malay and english poetry into a book. It is time for me to step up, Ian. My recent flat foot injury has led to more problems and I might need to change my job as I can't stand too long and move quickly anymore. Sometimes it hurts to walk. Still I keep my fingers crossed. There are other people in much more worse situation, so I won't give up. Jayne's presence here has kept me going strong. She's such an inspiration. I really admire her.You take care, my friend.

Alid

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Sorry I had forgotten how busy you are and the problems you have been having but things will improve, your speech will go well and those niggly illnesses will get better, just be positive,
Yours as always Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

you know what? You always know how to keep me going.too. Your kind and encouraging words always remind me never to doubt myself. Thanks, Ian!

Alid

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