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Widowhood

Submitted by Lavender on Wed, 2020-05-06 10:35

sometimes she lies still
simply trying to gather
whatever remains

Style / type:

Structured: Eastern

Last few words:

An attempt in Senryu. Thank you.

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Comments

c lynn brooks

Wed, 2020-05-06 14:14

lavender

yes this is true , however there is so much more to it. Try expanding this poem

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Lavender

Wed, 2020-05-06 15:43

Hello!

Hello! I appreciate your reading, and I will consider your suggestion.
Thank you!
Lavender

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scribbler

Wed, 2020-05-06 16:55

I try

to not even think about a life after Susan. I think this Haiku is a lot said in a few words

Lavender

Wed, 2020-05-06 20:03

Hello, Scribbler,
My husband passed almost 11 years ago. I wrote a lot of poetry around that time, mostly pretty private stuff and much of it without shape or form. Through the years, my thoughts have settled, and it seems the core and marrow of my feelings don't need too many words. Thank you for your thoughts!
L

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Geezer

Thu, 2020-05-07 09:45

Profound thoughts...

are often cloaked in brevity. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Thu, 2020-05-07 10:16