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Why Did I Love You?... [August contest]

I'll never forget the why of why I loved you
You took me places I'd never been before
And brought me many admiring glances
Whenever we appeared together

I was entranced by your low, throaty voice
We moved together so well
I felt like a king astride your beautiful body
I felt like I could fly

Yes, there were bumps in the road
When we broke down and had our differences
I cried like a baby, with frustration
“Let's please start again?”

When you refused to go any further
I had to find my own way home
You always got a ride
Sometimes I walked

Now we are at the end, I can't go on
It's been a hell of a ride...
I hope you find someone new

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
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I think you will be surprised at the basis of this story. I will give it when the contest ends. ~ Gee.
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unrequited love they all say
look at the title
correct you may
else a techy foul may be

I don't mind losing to someone that has better work, but I'd hate to go down for a technical foul!
~ Geezer.
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the two ends of a relationship ...how it started and reason it ended...neatly captured in these lines...

as mentioned by Lovedly you need to change the title to Why Did I Love You which is specifically stated by Stan as a contest requirement.
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raj (sublime_ocean)

As I said to lovedly, I don't want to lose over a tech problem. ~ Geezer.
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