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Who will survive? [Tanka]

fittest will survive
if believed to be doctrine
will man or nature?

it's a writing on the wall
some choose to turn a blind eye

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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someone suggested that concise poetry forms are not recommended for the current October contest. Therefore, not marking this for the contest said to be for fun but to me the theme of this poem is more serious than fun..
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The question is rhetorical
Nature is time space and matter, Do rocks survive?

"some choose to turn a blind eye"....Here you make a point, but a point does not a poem make.
So now what?
Think: What of the power of language , texture , phrasing, mood, meter, etc.

for engaging with this write

as for your question "will rocks survive"? I guess they would if they're in harmony with nature

you may have read the tag line on nature.org which reads "nature doesn't need man, man needs nature"...this line carries a very powerful message, doesn't it?
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raj (sublime_ocean)

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