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BUT WHO CAN BLAME YOU?

Who can blame you
for falling for the darkness?
Who can blame you
for craving the silence?

From retiring into the lonely recesses
like a snail into its shell,
When the world is a volcano,
And the bones of buried people
is the skeleton of your memories?

Who can blame you
when all your footings fall amiss
And you land in the snares
and traps of the predator?
When love has a chandelier
who outbids what you can offer?

Who can blame a forlorn
Retreating from the battle of ambition?

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2nd stanza 2nd line instead of footling I would suggest using footfalls ot steps footsteps something along that lias I see it the only one to blame is oneneself as your are in control of yoour won body and mind

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