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White Whispers

after a week
of overcast weather
dark and brooding
like a pensive man
in thought

the blue sky
is a giddy revelation

with boisterous clouds
that no longer hold
melancholy
rain

it is God's optimistic
skywriting

white whispers
of better days

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and what a perfect ending!

Just a small suggestion, I would have reconsidered the line breaks. This is how I read it. The last call is always yours indeed

after a week
of overcast weather
dark and brooding
like a pensive man
in thought
the blue sky
is a giddy revelation
with boisterous clouds
that no longer hold
melancholy
rain

it is God's optimistic
skywriting
white whispers
of better days

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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thank you, Rula! and for the suggestions.

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good expression in simplistic form...good poetic vision...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

thank you raj

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Most excellent ....'nuff said

thank you!

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