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WHERE I'LL BE

Should you think to look for me
some day after I have gone
the grave is not where I shall be,
of that you can depend upon.

Why would you hope I would be bound
to bones and dessicated flesh
mouldering in the cold dark ground
where the winds never blow fresh?

Look for me in a chill sunset
at the end of a cold winter day
when the moon has not quite risen yet
to announce the end of day.

Or look about in early morn
as the sun wipes sleep from glowing eye
just as the day is being born.
Listen hard, I'll be nearby.

Anywhere the trees grow tall
and whippoorwills repeat their name;
where people seldom walk at all
and rolling hills are filled with game.

Hear me whisper through the wind,
smell muscadines upon my breath.
My lack of life won't be my end,
I'll still be around after my death.

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Sad but beautiful. As always perfect rhyme

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

Well, I was trying for uplifting lol. But one has no control how something is interpreted once it's released. Thanks for visiting...........stan

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Just as long as you don't mind a few others joining in lol.............stan

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going to die
down some lonesome valley
where Loved and Stan shall be waiting for thee

So sing with us Tom Dooley
where we all shall be......

your best in my view so far............ If you let me be audacious enough to say..... Stan u r the only MAN...!!!!!!!!

...;;;;''''Or look about in early morn
as the sun wipes sleep from glowing eye
just as the day is being born
listen hard, I'll be nearby
AS THE ''WOODS'' GONE BYE....

loved

Yes ya'll will Never be shed of me lol........stan

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LOL LOLOL LOLOLO ............

loved

Stan, it's a beautiful, melancholy poem. You've perhaps taken Christina Rossetti's "Remember" to help your own muse. The rhyming is perfect, to my imperfect knowledge. Not so sure about the title. All else has been deftly worked and a pleasure to read.
Thanks for sharing, all the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

I sometimes edit a number of my stuff at one time and I'm always a bit surprised when doing so leads to further comments. appreciate your dropping by

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our only WESTERN STYLE POET AT NEO
still
is stan my poetic fan
rather I am

I appreciate the fact you have always supported me

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otherwise
stan
no way
any one of neo's
can say

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