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when you are gone....

will you love to see me crying
tears rolling daily
and all relatives weeping
along with me

will you feel happy
beyond the silent clouds
as you see your spouse
draped in white and black

will you like to see a
widow staring out of a window
and just waiting for the Sunday
that should also take her away

no I know you wouldn't like it that way
so I will spend a simple day
maybe a week
to enjoy the hours we shared together daily

and I know you will be happy
as cold ashes can't weep
so for the balance of my life
I shall live like a normal wife

may remarry
don't tary
your ashes would have been absorbed
by the beach
so you will be happy
as with grand children
we all shall dance
and as days roll by
a tear or two may fall perchance

you came lived and made us all happy
and so i will toast a drink
my love for thee
till then just wait for me.....

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My, You are really starting to write from inside that frame, taking us on a lonesome journey to where satisfaction may be in an end but there again in a new beginning.
This write excels most of the writes you have written for a while keep it up,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

this was a sequel
to a poets challenge from California
who was wallowing

will u do this and that kind???? THE USUAL centered around himself

so i gave him a piece
only a small one...
of my mind
thanks for your EXCEL find!

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I am in the process of writing to computer from a notebook I wrote in when I was 15 years old, I may add to a blog as it goes on the comp, but in those days as a 15 year old and not world wise my thoughts are strange sometimes but I will put the start in as it is at the weekend.
It is going to take up a lot of my time so sorry my attendance will be less to Neopoet.
I need to put my writings in order.
Take care young Bard know we think of you
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

this is lovely but shouldn't alongwith be 2 words, my dear?


thanks I rely on my laps

haahhhaaa mean lapstop
some cum along some come alongwith
it should be along with shall correct iit

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