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When the party returned..

again, the sun shone
cherry blossoms everywhere
smiles were abundant
hugs, once again in fashion
cold Sam Adams beer parties

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Is it party time again? Why wasn't I invited? I could use a hug . . . and a beer. But--it's "shone," or "shined," never "shown" (unless her panties have"shown.") Your schoolmarm will surely hear about this error, Mark, LOL
(I'm such a card today, ain't I . . . .)
Jerry

Shame on me!
Thanks Jerry,
Hopefully it won't be all that long.
Just a bit of science fiction (hopefully not fiction)
Later my friend in in-groans Ha!
Thanks,

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A very positive message dear Mark you have here.
Hope all goes well the coming days.

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I place a lot of hope in science and the human ability to adapt their behavior.
Peace, my fair Lady.
All the best for you and your community over there,

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contain my excitement! I'm looking forward to the first Corona party! I hope that I am extended an invite. One neighbor on my street never got hugs though and he most likely won't if and when this ever ends. He reeks of unwashed body, whenever he is invited to a party, we make sure that it is outside so that we may stay downwind or is it upwind of him? Good to hear your optimism. ~ Geezer.
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It's why we are here, to get better at our craft.

but I decided to change the name of the beer.

https://youtu.be/beocSEd452I

check that out..

later

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Hello, Mark,
Just reading this makes me feel optimistic. We may pass the cherry blossom season, but the cold Sam Adams gives me hope! Enjoyed this!
Eager to learn your structure here: 5,7,5,7,7? Google tells me (and Google never lies) that this is Tanka, which is new and wonderful to me. Very nice.
Thank you,
Lavender

Yes, and I enjoy Japanese very much when I strap into it.
In their time they teach children to do the different styles (Haiku, Tanka and Sodoku) by sitting children i a circle and asking them each to contribute a line of proper syllables in relation to the topic and previous line(s).
So, when I write Japanese styles I think of being among the circle and playing the role of each contributor.
That for me is the fun of composing the short Japanese poems.
Thank you for dropping in.
Passing you a Sam Adams :~)
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Mark,
Your description of the children in the circle makes the style even more inviting.
Thank you!
Lavender

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