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When mom's in her grave still..

SHORT POEM INSPIRED BY A COMMENT FROM
A FELLOW POET NAMED, LOVED

Your words are prophecy
and strike electric
fierce and bold
fire
searing the soul
finding me hidden
in dark places
where no one
knows the way
uncovering my fears
and yours= own….

“mom’s in her grave
And someone is on
the next train”

Editing stage: 

Comments

You honour me Gerry
the worlds a fast moving away
towards eternity ….
moms and pops play hide and seek equally
in the far folds of the universe
one has yet to traverse
an outstanding poet like you
as I stand out too
but you are exquisite
what am I
you alone can say

a legend will I become like you one day,
someday
only heavens can say
let me not my wisdom betray
as I stand out in the garden all alone
Seeing the clouds go bye
in search of the one since gone

man…
a ticket to space for me..

loved

There will be nothing left of either of us when we sre gone but the words we have written, for therein lies the true self.

Joe

author comment

I read those comments, I love where you have taken them, nothing like inspired poetry ... well done

love your Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Interesting how dynamic poetry can be, even with the simplest of words. He did a wonderfuk job in doing just that.

love to you my Jane,

Joe

author comment

the balloon doesn't burst
so better poetry I continue to thrust
upon those who thirst ..

thanks by the way
to compose another one
I'm on my new found
pathway ..

loved

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