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When the Journey Beckons Everyone Home

Sunshine shadows
calms the battles,

that the wind can stir inside each restless heart...

melancholy
steals the folly,

well before the passing moments can impart;

~

sometimes sorrows
rule the 'morrows,

spreading dewdrops that awaken every eye;

in the long run
when the rain's done,

in the rainbow we'll believe enough to try.

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I like this write though the spacing needs more attention.
I think some would think this is dark but I understand that you are talking about the last journey where we'll all be called.

S1 L 2 I think you need "calm" not calms if you want it as a verb.
Interesting and a very appealing theme for me.
Thanks for sharing

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but they arebeautiful..draw one outside of one
symblizm of hope..beautiful too..
this is a different format.

long width runs of words
spacing
not sure if it would improve reading
with a more denser paragraph stack
drawn in more or not..
i kind of like it like this

its retro like written on an actual typewriter
and the way and expression of it also is
vintage feeling...
which is good....

for affect I like this very much!

thank you

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