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When an angel cries
When an angel cries
Wind and thunder
a roiling sky
storm is approaching fast
if only it would last
Lightening flashes
then it slashes a wound
in an already broken sky
Suddenly
like a bolt hurled by Zeus
an onyx stallion appears
wings ablaze
sparks flying from his hooves
a wild passionate stare
A roar to rival Thor
he stands before an angel
and bows his head to her
A diamond tear trickles from his eye
and that is when an angel cries
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Free verse
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cathy mccormick
Sat, 2019-09-28 03:08
beautiful poem. can't find
beautiful poem. can't find one thing to change
c lynn brooks
Sat, 2019-09-28 09:04
Cathy
Thank you for taking the time to read and your kind comment
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author commentBarbara Writes
Mon, 2019-10-07 14:38
great poem
i love it...Thor the god of thunder protecting earth is profoundly written in the elegant piece..
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2019-10-07 15:03
Barbara
Yhank you so much for your kind comment
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author commentROSYME
Mon, 2019-10-07 15:39
what an excellent
poem no mistakes at all
angels know it after all
c lynn brooks
Tue, 2019-10-08 08:44
rosyme
Thank you kindly
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author commentRottiestyl
Tue, 2019-10-22 19:53
I LOVE IT. .
Wow...finally a poem that in words of passion had that movie playing right in front of my eyes. “An onyx stallion appears, wings ablaze. . Etc. etc. A diamond tear. Just wonderful imagery. Great job!
like a bolt hurled by Zeus
an onyx stallion appears
wings ablaze
sparks flying from his hooves
a wild passionate stare
A roar to rival Thor
he stands before an angel
and bows his head to her
A diamond tear trickles from his eye
and that is when an angel cries
Rottie
Pegasus was a genius,
living within a suit of difference.
He liked what he was,
nodded in respect and
simply flew . . . away.
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2019-10-23 02:08
Many Thanks
for your very kind comments
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author commentc lynn brooks
Fri, 2019-12-06 14:24
Alan
thank you so much I truly appreciate your to kind words
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