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when all alone

the sun betrayed
the night wasn’t young
there were no friends
gentle of course none…

I waited for you
in hope too,
the day was lonesome
boring and annoying…
bolts were flying all around
friendly poets were asleep,
abs silence not a sound
yet I was dreaming true
were you lonely too....

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Or that message to come on your text phone.
Forget it. He's out with someone else
So sorry if you are really experiencing it
Better to immerse yourself in work
Or have I misinterpreted?

was a bit lonely
that's all
as perhaps you may not know
I am an actor of poetry
I get into my subjects soul..
have a nice working day
its still very cold


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Then never alone
Forgets the phonexxxx

occupy what ??


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That you are alone.
Or belief in God will say you are never alone.
I am always alone
Especially now when on my own
But when I work I am not alone
And then I wish... I were alone!
Surrounded by people who sometimes moan
Sometimes drone, sometimes groan

then how I wish I were alone

Ever tried phone sex?you are never alone !!

In those times when friends all seem busy time Does appear to crawl. Line 4 seems a bit forced to me but the rest read well in my opinion and I think what you intended to convey came across clearly.................stan

forced it out
perhaps I was trying to be a bit funny


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those that laugh alone are even to themselves not having fun, there are places to reach out to everyone, Comments the more you say the more will join in repartee but if you are really alone don't blame me lol
There are 7 billion people on this small planet so go find some, I have as phone here that only rings when I dial it from another to find the damn thing lol.
Try it phone someone, or go talk to people in Walmart or anywhere, no need to be alone, The message in the piece was good,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

you comment on my works
I shall as I always do yours
you ring my door bell
as others do....
then neither one of us will be alone
I promise you
but once in a while
when a guys guts ache
and so one is lonely too
when the docs at the gate
a pregnant lady is not lonely
isn't it so true?
So friends and friendly ones
when you are lonely and blue
who else can you think of
but a friend that have you
and it’s who, you now know too..


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I think this is a really nice piece of work, and I would be proud to have inspired this one, had to come take a look at what we were all talking about

bravo ;)

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

you are that inspiration
for those who want to learn
and in your footsteps
follow to laurels really earn

yes you are for me
that I can vouch
so be it for others
who would like to be so
inspired,lying comfortable on their couch...


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for the return


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