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What She Said

why put my body in a heavenly context
if you watch me shower from the bed
and think it beautiful
why disguise me in vain ritual

my name is not Eurydice
my breasts are round
my mouth a blossoming rose
my sex a secret best

veil me in poetry & I am still your beloved
why share the secret with the world
if I die will your mouth be silent
will the poet follow me into oblivion

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