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What Perception!
Your inner perception,
I perceive,
Varies like the winds speed
In a desert,
In the wilderness,
In stormy snowy environment
You perceive
In the quietude of the distant
Depth of your mind,
A talent latent, unexplored,
You feel lured
But I’ m an adamant donkey,
Barking like a dog,
At the wrong floor
Yes you alone perceive the sense of admiration,
A view you alone do take,
But alas my fate is a drowning one,
A ship at bay, like the Titanic.
Wait, stop, and see it’s sunk…
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage:
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Comments
Candlewitch
Sun, 2012-01-22 17:58
Dear Loved,
It seems like a lot of thought and work went into this pensive piece. Your title drew me in. And I like the way the whole poem flows. My favorite lines are:
You perceive
In the quietude of the distant
Depth of your mind,
A talent latent, unexplored,
You feel lured
But I’ m an adamant donkey,
Barking like a dog,
At the wrong floor
Very impressive! I am in awe!
always, Cat
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loved
Sun, 2012-01-22 22:30
thanks Cat ur wonderful
You always pass my way
and
give me a pat,
for my free verse
others give me a rap
loved