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Wendy

The wind, it cried of sadness,
the wind, it filled with sorrow.
Soon we were all there to see that
Wendy would come to be.

Se was like a butterfly from
the breezes caught in a web.
We watched amazed as
she fluttered there and
let simple words be shed.

There she was in her lonely way as
we sat close by and gazed.
Soon we found we were all the same as
we listened to each other
repeat her lovely name.

Looking up we were all in a smile and
viewing a wonderous sight:
Our fresh arrival, our Wendy,
became freed again and
within our words she
had taken flight.

We knew being caught up in that way
was something that should never stay.
From our loving whispers we came to say
carry all the Wendys through their trying day.
Help the sounds of sadness gently fall away.

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I may be mistaken, but if I remember Wendy was your sister? Mark you have a remarkably emotional poem here, I think you have reached many many emotions within this poem, starting with your first two lines and then throughout. I couldn't help but want to put fade away instead of fall. I think it makes it more gentle, but that's just me. A big hug. A very beautiful piece. Also spacing I may have kept stanza's? Let's see what others may think.

Thank you...Teddy

the pain there. It's a hard thing to let someone go; even when there is no hope for a recovery. But just knowing that they suffer no more, is a blessed relief. I feel the anguish here and hope that though her memory doesn't fade, the pain of losing her does. ~ Geez.
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It is a very special poem to me.
On the who: I was the leader of a workshop in town here for a few years when cognitive therapy was on the horizon and psychiatrists were trying to get patients to talk to them in reality. Even helping people like that understand that saying they were having a good day was difficult. Many could not communicate at all. It was a very cool job. One night we were outside and Wendy came down the street and sat with us and we talked with her. Later some years recalling those days and when those kinds of workshops were no longer popular I wrote Wendy.

On fade as opposed to fall. You are correct. I agree.

On the spacing: I had been working on this poem a long time, It began near 1997. I went looking for it the other night and could only find it on my cloud drive and tried but the spacing and making stanzas just didn't work but by the end of the day I may just transcribe it to MS Word in its proper form. It deserves it.

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THE MARK
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Wow, I'm sorry I was unsure, you have written a very beautiful dignified poem for Wendy and now it all makes so.much more sense and even more understanding. If you want I can put it into stanza's to show you only if you wish? Then your title seems most fitting. Thank you for taking the time to give an explanation. If this was in a book I may not have been able to have the inside idea. Just beautiful.

Thank you...Teddy

I just needed to take the time and transcribe it properly onto a docx.

THE MARK
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Top marks buddy.

Thank you...Teddy

Hi, Mark,
This is gentle. I feel the tenderness you and the others felt / feel. I can almost hear the soft whispering of repeating her name. Lovely, Mark.
Thank you,
L

You help me feel quite tender..

THE MARK
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