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WELL OF SILENCE

Like so many myriad others
I sit and scribble on a page
about love, nature or long past brothers
or consequences of gaining age,

And I spill my soul and heart
along with ink in every write
trying to put music in each part
often in the darkness of late night.

Tonight I sit here in the dark
beneath a halo of floor lamp
with memories of a singing lark
while outside the storm blows cold and damp.

I know some storm will be my last.
I know it's closer than it was.
I know I've less future than past.
I know time passes without pause.

Yet still I put my pen to page
in hopes each poem will turn out well
but errant thoughts still make me rage.
Will my poems fall into a silent well
once I write my final page?

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Structured: Western
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a good one! A little ragged at the end, but as always, deep thoughts that resonate with us older folks. ~ Gee.
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Come to Chat on the Darkside
every other Saturday night 8pm to ?
Bring your dark and delicious work
to show.

I hesitate to be thankful that this resonates with you lol. But we must all face doubts mustn't we?

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All OK and a neat piece about how you are nearly old lol.
One word right at the start could do with replacement.
" myriad " it was used and maybe still in translation of the old languages.
It has a straight meaning of 10000 and to me seems alien to your piece.
Happy new year and look after yourselves out there ,
Yours as always Ian ..

Words can build a nation

After myriad years and myriad poems on myriad subject written in myriad forms I still get myriad words wrong lmao. Appreciate the visit and will check out the use of myriad on edit

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I know some storm will be my last.
I know it's closer than it was.
I know my future is less than my past.
I know time passes without pause.
MAY BE ...

I know some storm will be my last.
it's closer than it was.
my future is less than my past.
time passes without pause.

A knowledgeable poet should avoid repetition
I SUPPOSE
rest it's your compo
scribble on as you wish
HNY 2020 STAN and Susan

I think intentional repetition can be a good thing in emphasizing a point.But I could easily be wrong. Thanks for dropping by

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Deep thought decked with poetic beauty. Nice.

chimaono

Thank you for dropping by and leaving such kind comment

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So good to read your work again! I have missed doing it. This poem is profound and easily relatable. Very nicely done!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

It's good to have you back and thank you for taking time to comment on this scribble

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It was my pleasure! Love your work!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

love this. last two lines' rhythm brings to my mind the sick rose which i love. regarding the comment on knowledgeable poets avoiding repetition, that is the first time i ever heard that. there are reasons poets sometimes use it and a knowledgeable poet should know that.

I have often heard it's best to avoid the close repetition of the same word but I think they mean random close repeat.I am always pleased to see you drop by........stan

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Never fear though I don't always comment I always read your poetry. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Thank you. I appreciate knowing that there are folks who enjoy my chicken scratches lol

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Hi, I'm new here, so I apologize if I say anything offensive. Don't think so, it's not my style. Have quite a lot of published poems and came second in IBPC in December 2019.
I love all of your poem, except for the first line. I'm not in favour of beginning with "like" and I agree with others that myriad is over used, though I've often used it myself. The end rhymes are perfect. I'm not good at fixed forms, tho' I've composed several sonnets that I might post here to get iambics and so on correctly.

Gracy

And welcome to newport. No need worry about offending me for posting your honest opinion. I'll likely do an edit on this one in a few days and when I do I'll keep your and others' suggestions in mind. BTW if you have any problems on site just holler at me and if I can't help I'll steer you to somebody who can

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Hi scribbler, I can't seem to find poems to comment on. Where are they all? Thanks.

Gracy

I have found the easiest way to find some poems to comment upon is to click on the "Tools" tab at the top of the page and then to click on "Track all site activity" which lists all the items which have been most recently posted/commented on/edited - it also shows how many comments have been made on each one, so you could go for a poem not yet read/commented on if you wished.
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

your beating me to a response. Always good to point new members in the right direction

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..doesn't one?

xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

Edna's response

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Thanks to all of you. Will see about this now. Best

Gracy

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