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We need to believe (following Robert Frost)

we need to believe

we need to be brave
till we lay in the grave;
we need to be strong
when everything's wrong;
we need to believe
so we can live
as we are the kings
of our lives and dreams!
hey, can you hear?
the freedom is near!
so make your choice,
don't hide your voice!
come on, go ahead
but don't lose your head!

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in this line: and so we can live

take out (and) it is unnecessary and detracts from the poem. otherwise you have a fine poem.

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Thank you,Cat. I did what you said.Looks better!

author comment

Cat, and only have to add, that you have a misspelling in [com'on]. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Thank you.

author comment

Apt! So lovely. Very educative and instructive. Nice composition

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

Thank you!

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Thank You,Mark! Glad You think the same!

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I think most of Frost's rhyming poems were broken into stanzas. But I think the message is clear. Welcome to neopoet. If you have questions about navigating here or anything else just ask me or about any member. In the mean time stay safe in Odessa

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