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We Breathe As One

Our breath comes in wisps of passion
and becomes one
I feel your heart keeping rhythm with mine
your whispers
my murmurings entwine
my tears touch your cheek
your tears meet mine
they flow together as one
are they tears of joy?
or that of fulfillment and content
oh babe when will this be?
this blending of you into me

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Hi, Chrys,
This is elegant and thoughtful. "...your tears meet mine, they flow together as one..." Gentle and reserved, yet passionate, too. Quite beautiful.
Thank you!
L

Thank you so much

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So very elegant your imagery, a very softly written piece which sends encouagement to those maybe frightened to ask such a question. When will we be one? Beautiful.

Thank you...Teddy

As always thank you for those kind words

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Hi lynn, another romantic poem, lovely imagery and questionning. The title, content and all else are so inspiring. Thanks for sharing, best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

thank YOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR KIND WORDS

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