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We Breathe As One
Our breath comes in wisps of passion
and becomes one
I feel your heart keeping rhythm with mine
your whispers
my murmurings entwine
my tears touch your cheek
your tears meet mine
they flow together as one
are they tears of joy?
or that of fulfillment and content
oh babe when will this be?
this blending of you into me
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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north carolina usa
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Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson
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Lavender
Sun, 2020-08-23 21:48
We Breathe As One
Hi, Chrys,
This is elegant and thoughtful. "...your tears meet mine, they flow together as one..." Gentle and reserved, yet passionate, too. Quite beautiful.
Thank you!
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-08-24 07:07
laveder
Thank you so much
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author commentTeddy15
Mon, 2020-08-24 04:21
Dear Chrys
So very elegant your imagery, a very softly written piece which sends encouagement to those maybe frightened to ask such a question. When will we be one? Beautiful.
Thank you...Teddy
c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-08-24 07:08
Teddy
As always thank you for those kind words
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author commentGracy
Mon, 2020-08-24 15:06
Hi lynn, another romantic
Hi lynn, another romantic poem, lovely imagery and questionning. The title, content and all else are so inspiring. Thanks for sharing, best, Gracy
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2020-08-24 16:27
gRACY
thank YOU VERY MUCH FOR YOUR KIND WORDS
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