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Submitted by Starlight on Sun, 2012-04-29 18:47

ink forming into words
in
the back of my head.
raging
and scratcing behind my teeth
tempting
to spill through my lips.
swelling.
threatening to overflow.
our
ideas explode on a blank page. a
pen
fused to our viens. our ink
forms
a lucid spill over a white canvas.
thoughts
scream out loud caressing our minds. wrap
around
the soul. for we are all
poets.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
so this form is different, just a trial and error thing. read it normal than go back and just read the short lines.... it's rough. choppy and desperate for improvement!!
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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emogothgirl

Sun, 2012-04-29 20:28

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i just love you sometimes. that's all.
mag

Starlight

Sun, 2012-04-29 20:41

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. we banned that SIGH word. :)
i love you all the time
thats all.

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scribbler

Sun, 2012-04-29 20:57

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in our minds the words all fight
to be the first to see the light
each one hopes that it will be
a part of perfect poetry........................when that muse hits it seems we can't write fast enough doesn't it ? lol I'm sure there's a name for this form of poetry where every other line consists of a single word but it will be up to a more learned scribbler than I to know what it is..............stan

Starlight

Mon, 2012-04-30 06:06

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thanks for reading stan! :D

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weirdelf

Sun, 2012-04-29 21:07

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From chat I told you I got the feeling of a scratchy quill pen before me you had just seen a movie showing it, and thought about it for this.

This has a much unsuspected depth as a winter bare oak

cheers,
Jess
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'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
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Starlight

Sun, 2012-04-29 21:11

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Thanks Jess! and i will be thinking about changing that dreadful word to something more suitable :]

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weirdelf

Sun, 2012-04-29 22:10

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especially here something much better could be found.

cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry

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